Yay for more editing!

Hi guys. So I'm starting to get all ADD again. I'm getting excited about Merkiss and not focusing on "I Know How You Feel" editing. I guuuess I could do both at once... I'm hoping to get a chapter of IKHYF done a day and finish by March 30th but I don't know. I've prom and my musical all this month so... only time will tell! I'll keep you updated though!
So today I was looking through chapter two and realized that since Olivia is looking at the world with much stronger senses that their should be TONS of meticulous detail. So I tried to fix it up a bit. Here's a description of a nurse when Olivia was in the hospital:

I turned my head quickly torwards her. She was small and skinny with blonde hair and blue eyes. I could see about a half a centimeter of her roots to know her hair wasn’t natural. Again I had to focus on the words she said and unglue my eyes from the very light birthmark right underneath her left eye.

How does that sound? Meticulous enough? I'm going to use this so you can see my main characters in your head. I wiiiill describe so much that you'll get sick of all the vivd imagery!!! Well, hopefully not. Bye for now!

Peace&<3,
Angela

Editing Status
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Chapters Edited: 1/24